Apr 20, 2010

The Battle Surrendered - Part Three

     The Battle Surrendered 
Part Three
Storyteller SilverLoom 



     I lifted my shackled wrists up and said wistfully, “I’m chained. I don’t know where the key is.”
     He reached into a pocket on his tunic and took out a tiny gold object. “You mean this key?” Grinning at my surprise, he quickly bent to unlock the chains on my wrists and ankles.
     “How did you know I was here?” I inquired as he unbound me.
     “Well,” he replied, “I’m here to train you. And I can’t train you if you’re locked up like this.”
     I decided not to push the question he had obviously avoided and let the conversation carry on. “Train me? Why?” I had read many stories of kids who were sucked into fantasy worlds and trained to be warriors for special missions. The thought that I could be like them filled me with jittery excitement.
     “‘Why?’” he repeated, letting my final shackle fall to the floor. “You think you don’t need training?”
     “No, no! It’s just that… why me? Why was I chosen to be trained? Why were those creatures after me?”
     He looked me in the eye. “They are after all of you, dear heart.” With that, he turned back toward the rope, leaving me to follow and wonder what he had against direct answers.
     It was fairly easy to climb out of the dungeon with my feet braced on the wall and my rescuer beneath me to give me a lift if I needed it. Soon, he and I were treading the green grass outside my prison. I shaded my eyes from the sun as I turned to look at the dreadful place. It was a single, tall tower without any doors or windows that I could see from this side. No banner flew from the top of this lonely turret, so I had no emblem to associate with the enemy who had captured me. The tower was set in the middle of a forest.
     “Um, so, Sir…?” I let my sentence trail off and turned to look at my rescuer, who was busy coiling the rope. “Sorry. I didn’t get your name?”
     “Jesus,” was the calm reply.
     I balked. His grin returned as He added, “You wanted directness.”
     Now I had to decide if it was a complete miracle or complete lunacy. The fact that He could read my mind pretty much ruled out insanity, but could it really be Him?
     Before I could say anything, He stretched out His hand toward me. One look at the ugly scar marring His skin was enough to convince me. My mind spun.
     He pulled me out of my circling thoughts by pointing out, “You were about to ask Me something?”
     “Uh, yeah. When do we start… um, that is, when are You…?”
     “When does your training begin?” He prompted.
     I nodded, still dumbfounded.
     “When you are ready,” He said.
     I managed to squeak out, “Am I ready now?” 
     He smiled. “You tell Me. Are you?”
     “I think so.”
     He waited.
     “Yes. I’m ready.”
     “Good. Then let’s get to work.” He shouldered the coiled rope and strode into the forest. 


11 comments:

Millardthemk said...

That was just the kinda turn I wondered about. Very interesting development!

Storyteller said...

Thanks, Millard! I have to say, you just about killed me via laughter with your comment on part two. ;) Epic.

Jake said...

Ooops... My computer won't show the Battle Surrendered Part Two. The post I see says Part Two, but it has the content of Part One. And Part One (the post) disappeared. Which means that I've read Part One and Two.

Do you think, once you're done you could post the entire thing?

Sorry, don't want to be a bother! :)

Isaac Permann said...

Sweeto!
one thing... i cannot find part 1 on this story. at least it is not showing up on my computer.

Storyteller said...

Oh, no! I'm so sorry about the problems, guys! You two are not the only ones to report stuff like this. Thanks for letting me know.

For now on, I'll be posting The Battle Surrendered both on this blog, and a thread on the Underground forum. Here is a link to the thread: http://www.heedtheprophecies.com/theunderground/topic.php?id=309

Thank you again for commenting about it! I don't know what the problem is, but I'm sorry it's not working!

Storyteller said...

Oh, by the way, make sure you scroll past the first few posts. The story is the last post of the thread (as of now).

Jessica said...

Absolutely beautiful Storyteller. I can hardly wait for more it is so powerful.

Galadriel said...

It's very interesting...I love the part about "directness." Very cool so far.

Barie said...

Storyteller, part two won't work for me either. Perhaps it's because I just updated my internet explorer? I dunno :(

Storyteller said...

I'm so sorry, Barie! I don't know what is going on. :( The story is posted on the Underground.

Storyteller said...

And thank you, Jessica and Galadriel. I am so glad you like it!